Friday Fictioneers – Impossible Salvation

Today’s story takes us to the early days of Dan and Sara, who, whether it shows yet or not, play significant roles in Angelique’s story. I’m not crazy about this one, mainly because that 100 word limit got to me again. I would have loved to express more tumult and tenderness, but alas… 100 words. You have to be an angel or something for me to go beyond that boundary.

For more on Dan and Sara, see:

Not What We Had Planned

Another Kind of Death

copyright-David Stewart

Photo copyright-David Stewart

Impossible Salvation (100 words)

“That’s it? You’re leaving?” She ran to catch him. “You have a gift, Daniel!”

“My gift won’t pay the bills, not like I want.”

“Is that all these years have been to you, a paycheck?”

He set his cello case on the damp ground, burrowed his hands deep into his pockets. “I wanted to tell you another way, somewhere less public.”

Sara focused on the statues behind Dan. The second figure, sunken in hardened concrete, unable to breathe, prayed for impossible salvation. And then Dan’s hands were before her, cradling a velvet box.

“I had no intention of leaving alone.”

Friday Fictioneers (n): A world-wide community of writers addicted to writing 100 word stories based on a photo prompt provided by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields.

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41 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – Impossible Salvation

  1. omg this made me feel so weak ^^ with valentines day and all.. so sweet…
    sunken in hardened concrete, unable to breathe, prayed for impossible salvation — loved this line too ^^

  2. Wow, that’s a great reversal from the despair of the statue buried in stone to a proposal. Perfect too, considering the upcoming holiday (today in this time zone). Hopefully they can have a happy ending together. Will we see these characters again, do you think?

  3. I love the line: “The second figure, sunken in hardened concrete, unable to breathe, prayed for impossible salvation.” I’m glad she found some kind of salvation after all.

  4. This did take me by surprise unlike the usual proposal scenes where you know what’s coming next. Very well done!
    I also liked the way you molded the prompt in the story. Very professional if I may say so. 🙂

  5. Hmmm… how did I miss this? Glad I didn’t.
    Never say you are not crazy about something you write. This was a satisfying 100 words, and part of a longer story…. that’s where the other words are. I liked the way you tied into the picture.

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