Friday Fictioneers – Out of Order

Copyright -Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Photo Copyright -Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Out of Order (100 words)

Everyone takes the stairs. Long after the “Out of Order” sign tore from the metal grating, they still avoid the rickety elevator. The wreath and the cheap Styrofoam angel, spray painted gold, remind the tenants of the kid who never got off.

It’s been decades since my brother disappeared, and I’ve told no one my secret. Been watching that stupid elevator the whole time, though. He isn’t coming back.

Metal screeches against metal as I open the elevator door. Stupid of me not to have done this sooner. There are better worlds than this. I hope my invitation hasn’t expired.


Friday Fictioneers (n): A world-wide community of writers addicted to writing 100 word stories based on a photo prompt provided by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields.

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19 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – Out of Order

  1. Something’s definitely out of order here but what it is exactly, who knows? Did she kill him? Did he go to another world, to heaven, to…again, who knows? And she’s invited, too? Interesting.


    • Between us, I saw this as a portal to another world that the two brothers discovered as children. One brother stayed, the other one – the narrator – returned to our world, but has not decided, decades later, to join his brother in the other world. I like the other ideas, too, and was kind of hoping to inspire a bit of mystery. 🙂

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