Friday Fictioneers: On Claire’s Command (and a bonus story!)

The problem with writing a series through Friday Fictioneers is that eventually, you figure out where your character is going and realize there are only so many stories left to write. If the photo prompt doesn’t fit with the plot you have sketched in your mind, you might have to set aside the series for a week. The good news for Angelique’s friends is that this isn’t that week. You can thank Claire, who instructed Angelique to release her grief far away from human populations, for today’s story.

Bonus: Link to alternate story at the bottom of this page. Please follow the link to meet a couple of my other imaginary friends! 

Copyright-Renee Homan Heath

Photo Copyright – Renee Homan Heath

On Claire’s Command

The sun scorched Angelique’s bare shoulders as she limped down the empty boardwalk. When wood gave way to sand, course granules crept between Angelique’s toes, sinking her feet and slowing her progress. She fought back tears as warm saltwater stung her ankles. She could not stop here. In the distance, the sea spread her arms to embrace the azure sky. With a tearing sensation pulsing down her spine, Angelique ran through the shallows, lifted herself from the calm waters of the Atlantic, and set course for the horizon.

An hour later, lifeguards raised red flags all along the eastern coast.


(For an alternate story, please click here).

Friday Fictioneers (n): A world-wide community of writers addicted to writing 100 word stories based on a photo prompt provided by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields.

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42 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers: On Claire’s Command (and a bonus story!)

    • Storm coming, rough waters, DO NOT SWIM!!! The bottom photo was actually taken the day before Irene hit South Florida. The air was so thick with mist all my photos were tinted gray. Had to clean my lens afterward.

  1. I liked the imagery you created about Angelique’s melancholy in first stanza.. And the last line has set the pace for I think what’s to come in the next part! 🙂

    • Thank you, Rochelle. She does have a rough job, and it’s so sweet to hear all the concern for her this week! I love it, and I can’t WAIT to show you that she’ll be alright in the end! 🙂

  2. I am starting to really look forward to you and Angelique’s stories. Never thought angels would have such a hard time of things. I do enjoy her so. 🙂

  3. I kind of felt like she was stretching for freedom… I guess I need to go back and bridge the gap in the story so I know what’s going on. However, I like this and you pushed a lot of emotion into it. Good one!!

  4. Lisa – This is my introduction to Angelique, but i like the thought of a recurring character through these prompts. It takes more disicpline to keep the cointinuity going. I am sure that is a great way to improve your story-telling. This 100 word snippet shows your skill.

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